In a flash draft

Yesterday in Te Ngahere we got to write any type of story with any writing genre. I decided to write a recount about a accident that happened during the holidays. Our WALT was to write and level a piece of writing. I think I did well on making sure my writing made sense and made sure that there were no spelling mistakes. I think I could work on adding a bit more interesting words that could replace basic words. This is my draft piece of writing:

NOTE: THIS IS NOT A NARRATIVE AND IT ACTUALLY
HAPPENED!!

This has never ever happened before. I mean everyone puts on
their brakes before exiting the car.
Otherwise your car is going to roll backwards.
But sometimes you make the mistake to either think you put it
on or you forget to do it. These times only happen once
in a while but you can either be lucky
(no cars hit you or your car doesn’t hit anything)
or you can be unlucky
(where you do get hit by a car or you do hit something).
That would be EXTREMELY bad.
In this case we (my brother and I) were lucky.

It all started on the last week of the school holidays
on a Wednesday when we had just finished collecting something
for lunch. My mum had just “parked” the car to run something
inside and she said to wait in the car with my baby brother
(Ace). I was studying a book when my brother started crying.
I was about to tend to him when I realised
the car was moving backwards onto the road!!

I screamed as loud as I could hoping my mum would hear
but she didn’t come running. The car landed onto the road
with a thump.
I was freaking out because I though a car would come down
or up the road and crash into us or we would smash
the fence on the other side of the road!
Either way, me and my brother (or the car)
would of been toast. Luckily none of that happened.
A boy riding his bike look at the car like it was the most
bizarre thing he’d ever seen
(I’m sure no one sees a car reversing without a driver).
My expression: HELP!!!!! SOS!!!!!!

When my mum came out of the house she went to look
in the driveway but to her surprise, there was no car!
She looked across the road with both terror and laughter
in her face.
I was giving her my um-help-us-before-people-start-gawking-at-us look.
She came running and I said “OMG! Where were you?
That was so scary! I thought me and Ace were going to be
toast!!” She laughed and a wave a relief washed over me.
Neither my brother or I were toast.

Moral of this recount: Always check that your brakes are on!!!

Bay bush action!!!

Last week in Te Ngahere, 2 people from bay bush action came to our class. Their names were Stella and Brad. They showed us possums, Kiwi and Hedgehogs. They demonstrated us how they used a trap and the bait they use to catch rats, stoats and other pests that kill native birds. We also got to see pictures of different native and endemic birds and insects. They placed traps around our school to catch any rats in our creek. We hope that our school will be the first rat free school in New Zealand! Here are some photos of we did!

My awesome moment in time writing!!

Last week in Te Ngahere we wrote a piece of writing about the forest. Our WALT was to use present tense and have descriptive language in our writing. I think I did well on adding description in my writing. I think I could work on adding a bit more to my story. Hope you enjoy my writing!

Moment in time

The canopy of trees hang above the bobbing heads. Speaks of sunlight, dancing on the muddy track. Overhanging branches, hitting unaware humans. The lush bush home to amazing creatures. Amongst the trees are bright and colourful fungi, cloaking from the harsh sun and relocating into the darkness of the tree. If you close your eyes a melodic bird tune will play. Creatures prowl up to their pray waiting for the perfect time to pounce. The sense of being in the forest with the birds, creatures and forest delices fills you with a pacifying feeling as you leave the forest.

Our ecosystem explanation writing!!

Since term 1 we have been working on our healthy ecosystem, explanation writing. Our learning intention was to use the correct structure for a explanation. In our explanation we wrote about what an ecosystem needs, what is in a ecosystem and the threats to a ecosystem. A healthy ecosystem needs a producer, consumer, decomposer, inorganic matter and organic matter. Without those things the ecosystem with be unbalanced. I enjoyed writing our explanation because I think that I did well describing the roles of the producers, consumers, decomposers, inorganic and organic matter. I think I could work on finishing it earlier. Here is my piece of writing:

What is a ecosystem?

The parts

A healthy ecosystem consists of both inorganic (non living)
and organic matter (living).

These inorganic and organic are place holders
to keep a ecosystem from tumbling.

Inorganic and organic matter work together.
The balance of the ecosystem relies on inorganic and
organic matter.

Producers

There are many different parts of an ecosystem and each
one helps each other to survive and keep the ecosystem
from getting damaged.

Those things are producers, consumers and decomposers.
Producers are important to feed the consumers.

An example of a producer is kelp.

It soaks up energy from sun and rain and when
eaten the consumers get energy.

Consumers

In a ecosystem there are different types of consumers.
There are herbivores (which eat producers),
carnivores (which eat other consumers),
Omnivores (which eat a mixture of both consumers and
producers) and finally there are scavengers

(which eat leftover food from other fish).

Decomposers

Decomposers break down dead material.

An example of a decomposer is bacteria.

These decomposers are a type of burial team for fish.

An unbalanced ecosystem

Some ecosystems are strong ones and can rebalance
after a minor change in their ecosystem.

Although a small and quite fragile one is easy to tip over.

All fish depend on a healthy ecosystem.

A kina barren is when people overfish
(because fish eat kina) and then the kina population
explodes and they munch all the kelp which can be
harmful to baby fish because they have no place to hide
and develop into adults.

My finished metaphor poem

A couple of weeks ago we posted a draft of metaphor poem.
We had to improve our writing and add more description.
We were learning to use language features appropriately showing a developing understanding of effect.
I did well on improving my metaphor poem but what could make it better is by adding a bit more detail.
I hope you enjoy reading my poem!

Taleisha is...

Taleisha is candyfloss, ideas sticking in her mind.

Taleisha is a pencil case, full of knowledge and thoughts.

Taleisha is a Kauri tree, protecting the little Kowhai trees

Taleisha is a bewildered emoji, curious to learn new things

Taleisha is a toasted sandwich, that is warm and inviting

Kaitiakitanga o Te Moana (Guardian(s) of the ocean)

In Te Ngahere we have been learning to make connections with different things we have viewed or read. We were learning about Kaitiakitanga o te Moana (Guardian of the sea). I enjoyed learning about Rahui, kina barren and Kaitiakitanga o te Moana.  I found out a lot about the Moana and what is happening in the ocean. I found it a bit difficult to synthesise our learning when we first started but now I have gotten the hang of it.

Taku Pepeha (My Pepeha)

We have been working on our digital pepeha. We were learning to share our pepeha to our class  and teachers with confidence. I enjoyed learning about my family. The thing that I found challenging was finding all my families maiden names (names before they were married) and also pronunciation. I hope you enjoy my visual pepeha.